Korean Job Discussion Forums

[Youngben88]

Anyone remember a big police bust here in late 2007, around October?

[maitaidads]

Yep- some of the Nigerians I used to buy from were targeted.

[Youngben88]

I meant in the club in Helios

[guavashake]

IIRC, the story reported is that a group of individuals from a country with a reputation for advanced drinking skills verbally protested at closing time and demanded further alcoholic beverages.
They were kicked out and beat down with sticks/clubs, or something like that.

Is that what you are referring to?

[Joe Boxer]

[CentralCali]

A "gas gun" is simply a pellet gun which uses compressed gas to eject the pellet.

[young_clinton]

[Youngben88]

I was on about an incident involving me.

I slapped the ass of a girl I was talking with.

My buddy and I left, but I returned to the scene to be arrested.

Lots of people in the club jumped on me.

[Youngben88]

Later I had to pay two million.

[Stain]

Ok it's good that your story has a beginning, middle, and end, which is clearly defined. However, in this story there's no meat (detail). No suspense to draw the reader in. Beef it up a little and I think you might have something worth submitting.

[Youngben88]

It is true so I am just laying down the facts.

I have asked before about the severity of a two million won fine and people assumed I was messing about.

[Stain]

Yes, but even non-fiction needs those essential storytelling elements. The real truth itself requires embellishment to a certain degree to make it interesting. That's why history is so interesting.

[young_clinton]

[Youngben88]

Yes and it is annoying that it is not believed.

[Stain]