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[Alpha-Epsilon]

What is reprehensible is the curve, the wavy smiles of hips forming crowded streets, where smooth signs bleach the night blood red.

Beneath the mirth of mazes, there she's standing, a palpable peach blossom, black soot hair stranded, stoves simmering in her eyes, with summer empty.

Now that autumn breathes on her neck, her cheeks, the first kiss of welcome and fresh freedom, the coming months unseen, hidden behind the blacker cloack of mountains and

Man-made buildings she's taken shelter from, on the yellow-teethed sidewalks, where there's the crack of a smile forming the lavish footprints of the years when she was young, blood-red signs staining her body with youth's once bright-rosed dress

A red scarf concealing the petaled lips long shed to man.

[cbclark4]

It doesn't even rhyme.

[yingwenlaoshi]

[Atavistic]

[Bibbitybop]

Rock, natural shelters. Caves are nice, but the guano is hard to get out of the dress shirts.

[Plume D'ella Plumeria]

The OP is mentally ill, people. Have a heart.

[Atavistic]

[Rock]

Where'd you get this poem, OP? It sounds a little stinted, but much like Hopkins, or Suthersbye. Really yours?

What style is this in, just free style? It has meter, no doubt. Is there an indication here of sub-themes besides the old lady wearing a scarf? 'Man-made buildings' meaning that man's in control of this woman's destiny, her body?

Like it, this theme, since all the women in Korea seem to be under control of men.

Ought to publish it in that local magazine called the 'Roar and Tide.'

Forget these bozos.

[Alpha-Epsilon]

Jack Lamborsky's 'RealGirs' recited this at a poetry contest in Seoul not long ago, though it's yet to be seen if the content is correct, since JL doesn't write his poetry, just ad libs them.

Jack Lamborsky's part of the 'RunningProphet' movement now being recognized in Japan, and Thailand. It speaks of social injustices, particularly for women, thereby given his poetry a sort of prophetic recognition.

And JL? He's on this board frequently, used to go by the username TDN. I once knew him.

[RedRob]

Jaysuss Crisst!! Isn't there some godawful emo forum you could fcuck off to and slash yr wrists on? Fking drivel.

[Xerxes]

Wow, that does indeed sucketh, and that it was a professional's piece is amazing too.

I, too, thought that the OP had blown one out of his gaseous emission extremity upon us all.

I am ghast. Alack! Alack! Alack! Mine nuncles!

[Corky]

[indytrucks]

I hate poetry. Poets moreso.

[Tiberious aka Sparkles]

[Bondrock]

a reprehensible female
curves wavy miles of
*beep*-swarming rowdy
streaks where smooth
thighs beach the blood red night

neath the pulpy palpable peach
girth blossoms black snot hair
stranding droves
slithering with summer empty