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river1974
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 Posted: Fri Jun 17, 2005 1:17 am Post subject: sentence check |
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Dear teachers:
*If* your instructions and electronic response are not received by that time, a 1-month extension fee will likely be incurred *if* we cannot meet the response deadline.
There exist two "if" in the above sentence. It sounds a little weird to me. Would you write a sentence like that?
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Bob S.
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| Posted: Fri Jun 17, 2005 9:45 am Post subject: Re: sentence check |
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| river1974 wrote: |
*If* your instructions and electronic response are not received by that time, a 1-month extension fee will likely be incurred *if* we cannot meet the response deadline.
There exist two "if" in the above sentence. It sounds a little weird to me. Would you write a sentence like that? |
While technically it is correct, you are right, it does sound a bit strange.
I would replace one of the "if"s with "in the event that". OR rewrite the first phrase as "Should your instructions and electronic response not be received by that time,...". |
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river1974
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| Posted: Fri Jun 17, 2005 10:10 pm Post subject: |
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| Thanks Bob. Your versions sound more smoothly! |
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