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bluebary
Joined: 04 Sep 2006 Posts: 26 Location: Turkiye
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Posted: Sat Sep 09, 2006 2:36 am Post subject: help for improving my essay- |
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ı have been studing for one month for ielts exam to impact privious knowladges.it is very hard for me,as ı have no many time to develop ı have only one week. what can ı do for exam ? ı m waiting your advises.
the graph essay below about different modes of transport.is there any missing part ?
the graph below indicate that different modes of transport used to journay and from home to work and return in one european
city in 1960 ,1980 and 2000,firstly let us look up the changing of the number of the bus users.20 percent of people used
the bus for travelling from one place to another in 1960.it went up approximately 30 percent in 20 years.the use of the bus
after 1980 decreased about 18 percent which less more than the first total .it shows us that the use of the bus had not very
much prefer to travel or from work from 1980 to 2000.second travel vehicle is car which was used by very little percent of
people in 1960.but it increased sharply about from 7 percent to 25 percent in 20 years and its increacing contnued nearly 40
percent.it reached peak in 2000.in 1960,alot of people used bike,their rate was more than 25 percent,however it declined till
20 percent,and then it decreased rapidly untill under 10 percent.the last modes of the transport is foot.35 percent of people
prefered walking or it was an obligation for them.it reduced from 35 to below 20 between 1960 and 1980 and the decline kept on
it went down till 10 percent from 1980 to 2000. _________________ I am not MaRRieD |
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fussy
Joined: 05 Sep 2006 Posts: 29
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Posted: Sat Sep 09, 2006 6:13 am Post subject: |
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Hi bluebary,
I am not a teacher. I am a learner.
I think you should improve your typing skill. You should have correct capital letters at the beginning of sentences, and punctuations should be adjacent to preceding words. |
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bluebary
Joined: 04 Sep 2006 Posts: 26 Location: Turkiye
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Posted: Sun Sep 10, 2006 7:57 am Post subject: |
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Thanks fussy,you are right however I know that I didnot attention capital letters and punctuations.Exept for them,do you have any advice for ielts exam. _________________ I am not MaRRieD |
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