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[freshair313]

This is my composition for exercise. Please help me with the rationality and correctness of its expression and grammar. Your kind and hearty instruction will be appreciated very much.

Advantages and Disadvantages of Being Famous

Nowadays, more and more famous persons are come up in nearly every walk of life.

Generally, it is accepted that there are several advantages with being famous. To begin with, being famous provides a good opportunity for the famous person to enrich his experience and life. It helps the famous one to face different kinds of spectacles and to interact with varying kinds of persons. Besides, a famous person is always greeted with respect and courtesy. He lives in a world of kindness and admiration. What is more, being famous may well bring him a fairly large amount of money, if the famous one makes use of the fame appropriately.

But every coin has two sides, and being famous is no exception. There are also some apparent negative aspects with it. First of all, with being focused on by public, the famous figure hardly has private room in life; it seems that all of him are exposed to the public. In addition, the famous may be occupied with all kinds of activities besides his own work, which makes him so busy and tired. And he cannot freely enjoy the leisure with his family and friends.

When it comes to me, the cost of being famous is too high. On the whole, I would not sacrifice my normal life for the fame and its advantage.

[pugachevV]

The Advantages and Disadvantages of Being Famous.

Nowadays, more and more people, in nearly every walk of life, are becoming famous.

Generally, it is accepted that there are several advantages to being famous. To begin with, being famous provides a good opportunity for the famous person to enrich his experience and life. It helps the famous one to face different kinds of (scenarios?) and to interact with various kinds of people. Besides, a famous person is always greeted with respect and courtesy. He lives in a world of kindness and admiration. What is more, being famous may well bring him a fairly large amount of money if he makes use of the fame appropriately.

But every coin has two sides, and being famous is no exception. There are also some apparent negative aspects with it. First of all, with being focused on by thepublic, the famous figure hardly has any private life; it seems that all of him is exposed to the public. In addition, the famous person may be occupied with all kinds of activities besides his own work, which makes him so busy and tired. And he cannot freely enjoy leisure time with his family and friends.

In my opinion, the cost of being famous is too high. On the whole, I would not sacrifice my normal life for fame and its advantages.

Suggested corrections are in bold face. I have omitted some words.
I have replaced spectacles with scenarios. Spectacles is not wrong I think scenarios is probably more like what you mean.

This is a pretty good piece of work freshair.
Congrats.

[freshair313]

Thanks again for your help.