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[BMO]

Dear Teachers,

1. Would you please edit?
2. How would you write it? (to be like a native tone.)

Thanks a lot.

bmo

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Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to inquire about the status of my four book orders, of which one was placed through fax and the others on-line recently. However, none are shown on your website.

As these books are my gifts for little kids, I hope I will receive them in time so as not to disappoint them.

Thank you in advance.

[iitimone7]

the only thing that i would change is little kids-->children. end your letter with a formal closing...

sincerely,
(your first and last name here)


iitimone7

[BMO]

Thanks a lot.

bmo

[Lorikeet]

[BMO]

Yes, absolutely. It is definitely better.

Thanks.

bmo