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[togo]

Would you please look into this example?

I fear that my new car, a BMW, is robbed so that I'll have to do without it.
Is it correct the expression underneath?
'If someone rips off my new beamer I'll be lost'.
Will you please correct the whole message altogether, if needed?

Thank you in advance.

[bud]

It's pretty good, Togo. Here's what I would recommend:

Would you please look AT this example?

I fear that my new car, a BMW, is STOLEN so that I'll have to do without it.
Is the expression BELOW CORRECT?
'If someone rips off my new beamer, I'll be lost'. (Only needs a comma)
Will you please correct the whole message, if needed? ("altogether" is unnecessary)

Thank you in advance.

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Hope that helps!