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Hello.
My friend in China has asked me to
proof read his paper.His paper has
a touch of British English and Chinese influenced wording.
Hopefully it can be converted into
standard American English.
If possible,please PM with the corrections.Thanks:)
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Everybody has to conform to a basic rule of nature------death.Death is not fearful,even if the most wonderful play will eventually come to an end.However,a young girl's life,which,was also coming to such an end,moved me greatly and forced
me to show my solemn respect.

A little 13-year old girl whose name was Zhou Yue lived in Leiling,
Shandong Providence, a place abounding with golden Chinese date.
Like other children,she used to be very happy,lovely, and healthy.But
the illness of leucocythemia (blood cancer) puts an end all that.[But an illness raped everything.It was
leucocythemia,so called blood cancer.which one is better?]She had
missed the best time for treatment
because her family could not afford
hundreds of thousands of money required for her treatment.Apart from that, a same type of bone marrow could hardly be found.So she
lost the best time to cure her illness.The only thing waiting for her was the ending life.Her life, like a bud,was to be withered.She persuaded her parents to devote her body to the society, so that it could be used for anatomy by doctors to look for the key to this illness.

It was the news broadcasted by Qinu TV of Shandong at the evening of
27th November,2001.All the
journalists interviewing the girl were in tears,so was I.Zhou Yue said queitly "I know I will never recover.Mum has been laid off.And only dad has a job.Our family savings can only last for ten days
or more.It's the uncles and aunts
on society that showed their sympathy to me and donated money for my treatment.I don't have the ability to return.So after my death,please donate my body to the country for it would be a pity if my body was cremated.So I would like to donate my body to my country for medical research,hoping doctors can cure of such illness from which I am suffering."
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