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[MayWang]

Hi,
I wrote sentences as following:
This article grabs my attention because I never thought about how Cinderella spent her days before she met the prince, and I am eager to know the answer. Therefore, I will continue to read the rest of the patagraph.
Are those sentences OK? Because my writing tutor said I should write the sentences like these:
This article grabs my attention, I never thought about how Cinderella spent her days before she met the prince, I am also eager to know the answer.
I argued with my writting tutor. I said " Can we write three sentences without any connector?" He said "Yes". I am confused because he is a native speaker but I learned the rule that we should use connector to combine two simple sentence in my writting book.
Who is right?

Really confused ESL student
May

[Lorikeet]

Get another tutor. My students make mistakes like that all the time. I think you are right and your tutor is wrong.