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[Allouie]

Can I use the word 'acknowledged' in the sentences below?

- There are more successful businessmen than successful businesswomen. The number of the ACKNOWLEDGED female will increase by improving child care support system.

In the second sentence, I wanted to avoid to use the same phrase 'successful women' because they were already used before.
However, what I wanted to express was;

- The number of the successful businesswomen will increase......

Could you let me know whether the word 'acknowledge' means what I wanted to mean?

Thank you.
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YUKIKO

[CP]

"Acknowledged" means recognized, accepted, or admitted. I don't think I would use it instead of repeating "successful."

If you want to avoid repetition, try: "The number of women should increase with greater availability of child care."
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[Allouie]

Thank you, CP.
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YUKIKO

[beancurdturtle]

It works if you are more worried about writing convention than clarity. But then you lose your focus, which is successful businesswomen.

There is little harm - and much good - in repeating a word when it clarifies or emphasizes your point.

There is more harm done by leaving an important word out just to meet the non-repetition convention (it's not a rule).

When given a choice between; (a.) meeting a writing convention, and (b.) precise communication...

...be precise.

convention: S: (n) convention, normal, pattern, rule, formula (something regarded as a normative example)
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Daniel

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