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Crisi
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 Posted: Tue Oct 03, 2006 10:33 pm Post subject: as because |
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Dear teachers,
I would be grateful for any suggestions on how to improve the following sentence:
He has a big circle of friends as because of his personality he is popular with young and old.
Thank you so much in advance.
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Mister Micawber
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Well, I certainly do not like 'as because'. How about?--
He has a big circle of friends; because of his personality, he is popular with young and old.
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He has a big circle of friends because of his personality; he is popular with young and old.
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Because of his personality, he has a big circle of friends and is popular with young and old.
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