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[Doremifa]

Hello everyboby!

I am Doremifa, I am Italian, I study to the university and I must pass the PET exam with the merit. I did this exam two time but I don't pass it . Can you help me? In this exam I must write some letters. Could you correct it?

See you soon

Doremifa

[Doremifa]

Could you correct these descriptions? (I can not put the photographes here because the topic would be too long...)

Test 1, Part 3, Photograph 1A
In this photograph there is a woman who reads some books on the bed. She wears blue blouse, black trousers and shoes. I think that she is very untidy because there are many books on the floor and the waste paper bin is full. Perhaps she must do an exam of History or Political science. In the bedroom there is a little TV, a nice white and black rag doll and a picture on the cupboard.

Test 2, Part 3, Photograph 2A
In the picture there are three persons and two girls in the background who are reading in a library. On the left there is a girl with dark blue blouse, a green body and blue jeans. She is writing on some paper with a white pen while the man on the right reads a magazine and takes a cup of coffee. Near the man with the blue shirt there is a old computer with an old operating system or old program. All the people appear very relaxed.
In the foreground the third person is a man with a brown shirt and grey trousers who is drinking a cup of coffee or tea. He watches other persons who are working.

Test 3, Part 3, Photograph 3A
In this picture there are four players on the football ground. The man with the red T-shirt has scored. The goalkeeper has a blue T-shirt and is very sad because he didn’t stop the ball. In the background there are many supporters and a big screen showing the numbers of each player. On the left there is a player with a white T-shirt with number eleven and black shorts. I think that the match is very interesting because of the large number of supporters.

Test 4, Part 3, Photograph 4A
In this pictures there are nine people who are riding across a river. Maybe the first rider is a guide, he has a typical Texan hat, a dark shirt and blue jeans. In the background there are many trees. The level of the water is not very high and the weather is good. I think that this people are on holiday in the countryside.

Test 5, Part 3, Photograph 5A
In this picture there is a large audience in the theatre. In the foreground there are several musicians dressed in dark suits playing the violin. The director of the orchestra is dressed similarly to the musicians. In the background there aren’t many young people but the audience appear very interested and relaxed. I find the theatre is very beautiful judging by the “fancy” decorations.

Test 6, Part 3, Photograph 6A
In this picture there are two adults and a child. On the left there is a young man working in the shop. He is wearing a white shirt, a black and red tie and a pair of dark trousers. On the right there is a woman with a white blouse wearing reading glasses. She is buying salad and food for her child. The child wears a dress with flower pattern. In the background there are other people who are choosing products from the store. On the right there are other people who are standing in the queue waiting to pay.

Test 1, Part 3, Photograph 1B
In this picture there is a young woman who is phoning and chewing her reading glasses. While she is on the phone she is watching the monitor of her computer. She is wearing a pink blouse over pyjamas which feature a design using panda bears. On the desk there are a lamp, some papers, a tiger puppet, a cup, one floppy disk and a few CD-roms. Near the window there are some more books and two photos. I think that the girl is reading a file with Microsoft Office because there is an icon with a yellow cat at the top right of the screen. The photo is taken at night because the light is switched on.

Test 2, Part 3, Photograph 2B
In this picture there are many people who are sunbathing in a square in front of a pub. Some people are wearing white T-shirts and others are using sunglasses. On the right two girls wear shorts. I think that it is summer and this photo is taken in the afternoon or in the morning because the sun is shining. There is a sign in the square stating that it is allowed to read a cycle.

Test 3, Part 3, Photograph 3B
In this picture there are six players enjoying a game of volley ball. One player is not wearing T-shirt, another wears a dark T-shirt, three have grey T-shirt and one is wearing a white T-shirt. Three men are wearing shorts and two are wearing dark trousers. They play on the beach and the sun is shining. In the background there are several palm trees with people who are sitting or are eating. None of the players are wearing shoes because of the soft sand.

Test 4, Part 3, Photograph 4B
In the foreground of this picture there is a horse with a female rider. The horse is brown in colour while the female rider is wearing a pair of white trousers, blouse and gloves. She has a black jacket and hat. In the background there are a large number of spectators who are watching the competition under the red and yellow beach-umbrellas.

Test 5, Part 3, Photograph 5B
In this picture there is a concert in a big field. There are many spectators listening to the music. In the background there are two screens and in the middle there is a big white topped stage where the musicians perform. I think that isn’t cold and that the concert is either about to start or has just ended because the spectators don’t appear to be showing much interest but perhaps they are speaking together about the concert. That concert must have been good because there are many spectators.

Test 6, Part 3, Photograph 6B
This picture is taken at the market. There are eight people but three are vendors. On the right there are two man with a black T-shirts and in the middle there is a woman with light blue blouse. On the counter there are many watches and bracelets. All people are covered by a clear plastic awning. Maybe the man in the foreground is looking to buy a present because he are looking at the jewellery, possibly for a girl. Three other people are standing on the left are talking about the product.

See you soon

Doremifa

[Doremifa]

Why nobody answer at my question?

I am very sad!

Doremifa

[Doremifa]

Can you correct my descriptions, please?

Doremifa

[KejciorF]

Doremifa,

maybe nobody answered your question because no one believes you wrote the descriptions. The level of the language you use in your messages and the level of the language used in the descriptions differs.

K.

[Doremifa]

Thanks KejciorF for your answer. You are right. I wrote that description and after I sent they to a man that I know with skipe (my account is cuccuru1). I wrote here because I want to be sure that my descriptions are very good.

Why do you not correct it?

My descriptions are correct? Can you answer me please?

Thank you

Doremifa

[sabrina_c]

Why are you asking for speaking texts to be corrected?
As a PET oral examiner, I know when a student is reciting from memory . . . the student does not pass.

[Doremifa]

Why do you not want answer my questions?

Can you correct my letters If I post they?

Perhaps is all correct? Very well!!!

[CP]

If Sabrina C is right -- and I am sure she is -- it won't do you much good to try to memorize a better answer. And going through to correct all these descriptions is a lot like work. But for what it is worth, I'll give you my input on one of them. I'll go sentence by sentence.

Test 2, Part 3, Photograph 2A
"In the picture there are three persons and two girls in the background who are reading in a library." What are girls but persons? Are the girls also reading? Maybe it would be improved as, "In this picture, there are five people in a library. Three, in the foreground, are reading. Two girls in the background are [what? combing their hair?]."

"On the left there is a girl with dark blue blouse, a green body and blue jeans." Is the girl on the left one of the two girls in the background, or one of the three persons in the foreground? Is her body really green? Face, too? I am not sure how to re-write this sentence.

"She is writing on some paper with a white pen while the man on the right reads a magazine and takes a cup of coffee." Change "takes" to "holds" or "drinks," as appropriate.

"Near the man with the blue shirt there is a old computer with an old operating system or old program." Not "a old computer" but "an old computer." How on Earth can you tell from a painting that the computer has an old operating system / program?

"All the people appear very relaxed." OK.

"In the foreground the third person is a man with a brown shirt and grey trousers who is drinking a cup of coffee or tea." Add a comma after "foreground."

"He watches other persons who are working." Are the other persons the other four in the picture or someone else? What kind of work are they doing? I might suggest, "He is watching the others as they work."

Hope this helps.
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[Doremifa]

Thank you very much for your help! I corrected the test 2, part 3, photograph 2A. Can you see if it is correct? I will open another post where I will put my letters. If you wont, you can correct them. Post's name will be "Can you correct my letters, please?".

See you soon

Doremifa

Test 2, Part 3, Photograph 2A
In this picture, there are five people in a library. Three, in the foreground, are reading and writing. Two girls in the background are reading. On the left, in the foreground there is a girl with dark blue blouse, a green body and blue jeans. She is writing on some paper with a white pen while the man on the right reads a magazine and drinks a cup of coffee. Near the man with the blue shirt there is an old computer. All the people appear very relaxed.
In the foreground, the third person is a man with a brown shirt and grey trousers who is drinking a cup of coffee or tea. He is watching the others two people in the foreground as they work.

[CP]

This revision seems to be fine -- except I am still troubled with the girl in the dark blue blouse. Does she really have a green body? Green skin? What about her face? Green, too?
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You live a new life for every new language you speak. -Czech proverb

[Doremifa]

Excuse me... I forgot it...

No, her face is not green too Thank you!

Test 2, Part 3, Photograph 2A
In this picture, there are five people in a library. Three, in the foreground, are reading and writing. Two girls in the background are reading. On the left, in the foreground there is a girl with dark blue blouse and blue jeans. She is writing on some paper with a white pen while the man on the right reads a magazine and drinks a cup of coffee. Near the man with the blue shirt there is an old computer. All the people appear very relaxed.
In the foreground, the third person is a man with a brown shirt and grey trousers who is drinking a cup of coffee or tea. He is watching the others two people in the foreground as they work.

What about the other descriptions? What do you think? Can you read them too?

Tyhanks