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Nice to meet you. This is my composition for exercise. Please help me to correct its grammar. Your kind and hearty instruction will be appreciated very much.


A Miracle
When Ren was a junior high school student, she attended the escort of school. She never forgot a miracle happened on her while the escort cooperated with the military band.
For the competition, the military band asked escort to assist them. When practicing, Ren noticed a boy. His contour and temperament was so charming that she couldn�t help but peeped at him for many times. She wanted to know this boy�s name, but she always heard others called him �monitor,� so she just knew the boy was the class leader of his class.
After practicing, Ren discovered the boy and she was actually on the same way home; however, she had never seen him before. In addition, every morning, she almost saw the boy went to the convenient store which was near her home. She not only felt very excited but also strange because the things were too fortuitous to believe. What made her confused further was she even got many weird phones which just called her name and then hanged up after she responded. She didn�t know who exactly was but she felt the sound was so similar to the boy.
The day of the competition arrives, the military band and the escort went to Taipei, and then went toYiaming National Park. Ren felt unbelievable again. How could it be possible that she and the boy almost like the same scenic spots? When Ren and her friends took picture at one spot, she saw the boy and his friends took picture in the vicinity. She thought maybe it is her illusion, but she seemed to felt the photoflash shot to her and her friends. Then the whole group went to Leoofoo Village, while Ren and her friends take the childish spinning coffee cup, she couldn�t believe that the boy and his friends were waiting for the next turn. Ren didn�t feel happy; however, she suspected the boy�s hobby because ordinary boy wouldn�t to play this kind of amusement.
Ren kept this suspicion in her mind until she got a letter from the boy�s friend. The letter listed many points that why the boy liked her and all his behavior just wanted to attract her attention. This unbelievable story that being liked by the person self like happened to Ren making Ren couldn�t help but said what a miracle.