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Health or Slimness, that is the question.


A lot of young women today are looking for a new fad diet to work a

miracle on their bodies. A lot of women are attracted to these fad diets

because they tend to cause rapid weight loss. However, these diets usually

depend on reduction in calories, which is a very unhealthy and foolish way

of losing weight. These low-calorie diets should be avoided because they

can cause serious problems like loss of muscles, dehydration, and weight

swings.

First of all, the disadvantage of the low-calorie diets is that they cause

the loss of muscles instead of fat. If people don't exercise at all and just

try to lose weight by consuming a small amount of food, their body looks

for another source of energy, burning muscles instead of fat. The reason

for this is that human body tends to conserve fat rather than muscles.

Moreover, muscles are the faster source of energy to burn. As a result,

some low-calorie dieters experience losing weight by muscle loss, not by

body fat loss. This is why people should be more concerned about lower

body fat than weight loss.

Another problem is dehydration. Rapid weight loss by low-calorie diets is

mainly caused by reducing the amount of fluid in the body. Therefore,

dehydration can occur along with negative effects like constipation, skin and

hair problems, and tiredness.

Finally, low-calorie diets could be dangerous because of weight swings.

When people go on these diets, they are likely to gain weight after a short

period of rapid weight loss. This is because of a defense mechanism by the

body to manage the food shortage by conserving calories. In addition, a

slower process of losing weight even depresses some people into quitting

the diet and overeating. This "yo-yo" dieting is extremely dangerous.

According to a report in New England Journal of Medicine, yo-yo dieters

have a 70% higher risk of dying from heart disease than do people whose

weight stays fairly steady, even if they were overweight.

Medical researchers say that the average adult female requires a

minimum of 2000 calories a day to lead a healthy life. However, a lot of

women are sacrificing their health for a slimmer body. Although

low-calorie dieting can lead to fast weight loss, it entails a great cost:

Their health, the most valuable thing in their life.

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Health or Slimness - that is the question.


A lot of young women today are looking for a new fad diet to work a
miracle on their bodies.

Many women are attracted to these fad diets because they can cause rapid weight loss. However, these diets usually depend on a reduction in calories, which is a very unhealthy and foolish way of losing weight.

Low-calorie diets should be avoided because they can cause serious problems like loss of muscles, dehydration, and weight swings.
A serious disadvantage of low-calorie diets is that they cause
the loss of muscle instead of fat. If people don't exercise at all, and just
try to lose weight by consuming a small amount of food, their body looks
for another source of energy, and burns muscle instead of fat.

The reason for this is that human body tends to conserve fat rather than muscle.
Moreover, muscles are a faster source of energy . As a result,
some low-calorie dieters lose weight by muscle loss, not by
body fat loss.
This is why people should be more concerned about lowering
body fat than about losing weight.

Another problem is dehydration.

Rapid weight loss by low-calorie diets is
mainly caused by reducing the amount of fluid in the body. Therefore,
dehydration can occur along with negative effects like constipation, skin and hair problems, and tiredness.

Finally, low-calorie diets can be dangerous because of weight swings.

When people go on these diets, they are likely to regain weight after a short period of rapid weight loss. This is because of the body's defense mechanism that manages the food shortage by conserving calories.

In addition, a slower process of losing weight even can depress some people into quitting the diet and overeating.
This "yo-yo" dieting is extremely dangerous.
According to a report in The New England Journal of Medicine, yo-yo dieters have a 70% higher risk of dying from heart disease than do people whose weight stays fairly steady, even if they are overweight.

Medical researchers say that the average adult female requires a
minimum of 2000 calories a day to lead a healthy life. However, a lot of
women are sacrificing their health for a slimmer body.

Although low-calorie dieting can lead to fast weight loss, it entails a great cost: their health, the most valuable thing in their life.

I found this quite interesting and well-written. I've made a few changes, that sound a bit better to me, that's all.