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I was wondering if anyone here could help me to edit or proof-read the writing below? Thank you very much.



My story
Hi, my name is Eunice. Today, I want introduce myself. I�m a fourteen-year-old girl, and I�m a junior high school student. I was born in a family which have five people. I live with my mom, Jessie; my dad, Raymond; my sister, Daphne; and my grandma, Mary. My mom and dad are kind to me. My sister is very cute but she has a bad personality. I still love her. I am a little jealous about my sister because she is taller and thinner than me. I don�t like my body shape so I decided to go on a diet. I love to play many sports, such as basketball, volleyball�� etc; I do exercise everyday to keep my body shape. I am good at swimming, playing flute, and plying violin. I won many prizes in swimming. My parents are very proud of me. My dream is to become the greatest swimmer in the world, so I practice hard to make my dream come true.
I have many friends in school; Tina is one of my best friends. She is very tall and thin. She helps with my homework all the time, she is good at mathematics, but I�m not. So, she teaches me math everyday, now, I had a better score and improved a lot. When I feel sad, Tina will tell some jokes to make me laugh. For me, she is the nicest girl that I ever met. Most of my classmates like me a lot, but I know someone is talking back behind me. It made me so upset. My friends try to cheer me up but in vain. Fortunately, my teacher knew my problem was and told about friendship and life philosophy. She told me: no matter how many people are talking back behind you, there is no doubt about it, the most important is to be yourself. I like doing many things in my free time. Sometimes, I go out with my friends and have some fun. But I usually go to the library on weekends because there are many special books there and I love to read books, which can help me learn a lot of knowledge. I like to read the encyclopedia because there is hundreds of knowledge to learn from. I also love to read the stories about great men, because the stories are very touching, I cried when I�m reading the story. They studied hard when they are in childhood to become the greatest man. Reading books can help me relax. Sometimes, I surf on the internet so that I can learn new things, I �m always active in learning new things, that�s my interest. Although I am just a teenager, but I should study hard right now.
Fast food is my favorite food, and I like fried chicken the most. But, fast food is not good for my health so I seldom eat them. I don�t like to eat carrots the most, because they smell bad. But my father told me they are good for my health. So I must eat it. It�s really disgusting.
The year 2014 will make twenty years since I graduated from high school. I think I�m a beautiful girl that time. I can do anything what I want. I can drive, I can drink wine, and I can get married.... That�s so happy.
I�m kind and generous to people. Many people like me a lot because I will solve their problems. I�m very nice and friendly. I love to help people. I�ll help people when someone is in trouble.
I hope you enjoyed about my story.