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Chan-Seung Lee
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 Posted: Wed Jul 16, 2008 2:06 am Post subject: in a way that is impressive |
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| He has a love for the game and an ability to convey the fast-paced action in a way that is impressive. |
Does it make sense?
If so, can I paraphrase it like this: 'He has a love for the game and an ability to convey the fast-paced action impressively.' ?
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MauraS
Joined: 11 Feb 2008
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Location: Canada
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| Posted: Wed Jul 16, 2008 6:36 am Post subject: |
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Yes, the way you used it looks great.
And your paraphrasing sounds too "wordy" to me. I mean, it is not grammatically incorrect, it just sounds like too many complicated, big words.
This sounds better:
....an ability to impressively convey the fast-paced action.
Hope this helps!
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