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[tisogai]

Below is a piece of writing my sister is working on.
I'm helping her, so please make sure it's grammatically correct.
Any change can be made to make it natural in English. Thanks so much.

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Do you think the time wil come when we can travel to the past and future with a time-machine? I believe it will and would like to meet Jeanne d'Arc.

Jeanne d'Arc was born in France in the 15th century, about 570 years ago. She received a divine message from God and followed it. She led the army into battle for Charles the 7th and her country.Eventually, however, she was burned at the stake. She was excuted even though she was a hero who saved France. I was so shocked to learn this history. I became sad, frustrated, and overwhelmed by the fact that this 17-year-old girl had to be killed without her fine efforts being recognised or appreciated. So I'd like to travel back to 570 years ago to save her.

There are so many other characters of history whose lives I'd like to change for the better. For example, Oda Nobunaga- I wish I could stop him from staying at Honnouji Temple on that night. I also wish I could save Marie-Antoinette from being excuted. I personally find so much unreasonable, senseless history, so I'd like to change the past by using a time-machine.

However, to change the psat means to change the present and the future. Those who exist now would disappear, or there would be people who will newly appear. If there were, just like me, many others who try to change the past, it's scary even to imagine that. Life is only once, and will not be repeated. It's the time given to everyone unpartially. It's a one-time thing, that's why everyone appreciates each precious day. It's a terrible sin to manipulate time as we want. So my conclusion is that a time-machine should not be made.
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