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[hiromi525]

My friend ask me to translate her Japnaese resume into Engish.
I am not confident that I translated.
Can you please point out any gramatical mistake?
If there is better expressions, please correct it.
Do you have a position named as sub leader in the company in U.S?
Please take a look at following expressions of the part of resume.

OBJECTIVE
Intern of the foreign department.

WORK EXPERIENCE
Sales / Corporative Sales Department
Consulting for my customers to deal with risks in life plan as a financial planner. Play a leading part in my team for our junior as a sub leader.
OR
Consulting for my customers to deal with risks in creating a life plan as a financial planner.

[pugachevV]

My friend asked me to translate her Japanese resume into Engish.
I am not confident that I translated it correctly.
Can you please point out any gramatical mistakes?
If there are better expressions, please correct them.
Do you have a position named as sub leader in the company in U.S?
We have many positions that are sub leaders but we don't call them that. We call them, such things as: , Vice President, Deputy Chairman, Assistant Foreman and so on. The prefix sub- is often considered to be slightly derogatory, in English
Please take a look at the following expressions in the resume.

OBJECTIVE
Intern in the Foreign Department.

WORK EXPERIENCE
Sales / Corporative Sales Department
Financial planning consultant. Played a leading part in my team as an assistant team leader.
OR
Consulting with clients to create a financial risk management strategy