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ziawj2
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 Posted: Sun May 06, 2012 6:19 am Post subject: Please help me check the letter of thanks |
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Please help me check the letter of thanks to make it fluency, nature, and acceptable to native speakers. Thank you!
Dear Lucy,
I am writing to express my sincere thanks for your beautiful flowers. I'd like you to know how much your flowers meant to me. You have a positive genius for selecting the right gift. I not only enjoyed your flowers, but also the delicate vase. I shall ever remember this gift as one of the most precious things in my life.
I will not be very busy the following days. I hope to have the opportunity of reciprocating. Would you kindly let me know what time you are at convenience?
I will feel very happy if you have time to make me a call. How nice it would be to see you again and I am looking forward to seeing you next time!
I repeat my thanks again for your lovely flowers. Please give my kind regards to your family.
Best wishes,
Han Xi |
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askeladd
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Location: Chicago area, USA
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| Posted: Mon May 07, 2012 8:47 am Post subject: Re: Please help me check the letter of thanks |
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| Please help me check the letter of thanks to make it fluency, nature, and acceptable to native speakers. Thank you! |
I will put my suggestions in red. These suggestions are merely how I would express things if I were writing the letter.
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Dear Lucy,
I am writing to express my sincere thanks for your beautiful flowers.
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the beautiful flowers you gave me
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| I'd like you to know |
I'd like to tell you
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| how much your flowers |
the flowers
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| meant to me. You have a positive genius for selecting the right gift. I not only enjoyed your |
the
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always
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remember this gift as one of the most precious things in my life.
I will not be very busy the following days. |
in the coming days
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| I hope to have the opportunity of reciprocating. Would you kindly let me know what time you are at convenience? |
what time is convenient for you
would be
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| very happy if you have time to make |
give
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| me a call. How nice it would be to see you again and I am looking forward to seeing you next time! |
I would omit "and": How nice it would be to see you again. I am looking forward to seeing you in the future!
To me, "in the future" makes more sense, because you haven't really established a definite meeting - it's still a wish/desire at this point.
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I repeat my thanks again for your lovely flowers. |
Once again, thank you for the lovely flowers.
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Please give my kind regards to your family.
Best wishes,
Han Xi |
Hope this helps 
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ziawj2
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| Posted: Tue May 08, 2012 6:25 am Post subject: |
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| Thank you very much for your careful check! |
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askeladd
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| Posted: Wed May 09, 2012 6:28 am Post subject: |
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You're welcome
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