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[hanygeorge38]

Hello Teacher,

please check the following errors :-

Dear Sirs,

Good day,

With reference to your message of today regarding a/m subject,
well noted with thanks.

Suez Canal Authority Personnel normally hold on thier pocket an
identification showing their names, job titles and a photo.

In the mean time, please find attached security contact numbers
as per your request.

Thanks & Best Regards
Redmar (Egypt) Dear Sirs,

Good day,

Dear Sirs,

Good day,

With reference to your message of today regarding a/m subject,
well noted with thanks.

Suez Canal Authority Personnel normally hold on thier pocket an
identification showing their names, job titles and a photo.

In the mean time, please find attached security contact numbers
as per your request.

Thanks & Best Regards
Redmar (Egypt) Dear Sirs,

Good day,

With reference to your message of today regarding a/m subject,
well noted with thanks.

Authority Personnel normally hold on thier pocket an
identification showing their names, job titles and a photo.

In the mean time, please find attached security contact numbers
as per your request.

Thanks & Best Regards
Redmar (Egypt)
Hany
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hany

[asterix]

Dear Sirs,

Good day,
(While it is a common courtesy to greet someone in person with "Good Day!"it is not usually found in formal business correspondence.)

With reference to your message of today regarding a/m subject,
well noted with thanks.



Suez Canal Authority Personnel normally hold on their pocket an
identification showing their names, job titles and a photo.

In the mean time, please find attached security contact numbers
as per your request.


This would be more succint if it were written thus:
With reference to your message of today, all Suez Canal Authority personnel are required to wear photo identification on their (breast) pocket showing their name and job title.

Please find attached security contact numbers as requested.

Thanks & Best Regards
Redmar (Egypt)

A formal business letter is normally signed off like this:
"Yours faithfully,"
(signature)
Name of signer.
Redmar (Egypt)