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Joined: 09 Mar 2003 Posts: 2111 Location: New Jersey, US
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Posted: Thu Jan 13, 2005 11:58 am Post subject: |
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Hi Hany,
I'm fine, thanks. How are you?
It's a little difficult to know for sure, as I don't know the terms and usual writing practices of your business. Here are some comments...
Please find here - And then you provide a quote underneath this sentence? Often in writing you will see "Please see below..." Using "find" would work well, too, but you probably want to switch "here" with "below."
under the required provision - First, will the reader know what the required provision is? I suspect so, but if not, you should specify which provision you are referring to. Second, you could separate this clause by commas to make it slightly more readable. This is not very important, though, as it is not a difficult sentence to understand.
quotation - Normally you would use an article - "the quotation." I think in this case it is ok without, though, as communications in your business tend to be terse, judging by other samples you have posted in the past.
measuring unit - I don't know what this means. If it means that different units are used (weight, volume, count, etc.) depending on the item involved, then this is correct. If you always use the same unit of measure, and you are saying that your company makes the measurement and then calculates the cost, then you would want to say "measured unit," I think.
All in all, your sentence is good and would probably be easily understood by a prospective customer.
Hope that helps. Happy New Year. |
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