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[Rock]

Sometimes I feel like crap. Never asked for this. Appeared on the international scene, took fictitious names to boot. Locked horns politically speaking, so move this if it's political in nature.

Grapple with my voice, the inner-me. Feel it gurgling, like a gusher, pivotal to a point but yet bursting upward. Like youth to adulthood.

Wondering where innocence led. Was it that I was spoon-fed, being American, and now must face what naivete dreads? Is it the insular thinking that most consider our hunger for bread? Now that I'm closer to China, my life seems to be at war.

Remember the folks back home, the Beinkes, the Klops and the Merles. The families with ten kids, the fathers with two hands. Would they see the big picture some want to paint, and that in a villainous view?

Now that China is afoot, what can one man do to portray his country of any value, and that without being stigmatized by greed? Since I am in the limelight via the so-called information age, would they know? Do they care? Or are they just unsophisticated, hard-working middle-class people that deserve to live honest lives, like me, God willing not deprived of democracy?

Which China, and some, paint black. Making me feel, it's a laugh. Being here, stigmatizing/stereotyping the lot of us, thinking you know who and what we are, buddying the bsers in Korea, the baloney blokes of beauracracy, the blow-hards of bulgoggi-fed-believe-it's-genuinely Korean, without realizing it's beef American bred?

"China Prohibits US Naval Vessel" from docking at Port Victoria, Christmas Day. HK

So it's said.

[tfunk]

You should ask your Korean co-teacher to help you with your grammar.

Writing fragmented sentences ('poetic') doesn't mean they are more significant.

[nicam]

Were you a creative writing major too?

I feel like I should workshop this for you, give you notes..

While your contemporary David Foster Wallace sentence structure works well in this case, it is a little too vague in certain areas. You start off clear and focused and trail off in the end.

Watch your cliches, man! "...to boot. Locked horns..." and "Grapple with my voice, the inner-me." for instance. You can do better than that sappy cliched crap. Like this, this is good: "Feel it gurgling, like a gusher, pivotal to a point but yet bursting upward. Like youth to adulthood."

Also, you go from your own muddiness, to what sounds like the barriers created for and by the lower middle class American dream, to, well... I'm not sure what about China. Is this 2 or 3 different pieces. It's fine to be fragmented, but not to be vague and lacking focus.

There! Hope that helps.

[tfunk]

[Yu_Bum_suk]

Has someone stopped taking his meds?

[BS.Dos.]

What a coincidence! I'm sat here marking my HS diaries atm and that post wouldn't look out of place with any of them.

[harlowethrombey]

When I read things I usually form a picture of the writer in my mind.
(many folks on dave appear with goatees and two chins).

For this rambling, borderline. . . something OP. . .


I got a sad-eyed emo-kid, but with a giant U.S. flag tatooed over his chest standing, triumphantly, but sloop-shouldered in front of a Mexican flag, drop-kicking a trash-talking unicorn, while holding in each hand half of a live marmaset he just tore into with his teeth and then spat the remains into a book and demanded that it be published immediately.

Best, rambling, insane OP I've seen on Dave's this year.

It's like someone learned English 3rd hand from a poorly twice translated collection of Marlow plays where all the articles were missing and there were helpful notes inscribed by a dyslexic literature professor who was wacked out of his mind on PCP.

[BS.Dos.]

[harlowethrombey]

[Sleepy in Seoul]

OP, just stop drinking. No more being pissed and you'll be able to write coherently. Problem solved!

[Lunar Groove Gardener]

Paint us a picture.

[beercanman]

I'm just surprised to see the "mod edit" in the title of the thread. The word was "pissed" = "peed" (and if that's getting bleeped there is something wrong)

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[harlowethrombey]

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