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passport220 · Joined: 14 Jun 2006 Location: Gyeongsangbuk-do province

I want to use this text, does it look technically sound?

Matt is a 29-year-old from America who used to think that all he ever wanted to do in life was make and play video games. He enjoyed it for a while, but soon knew there might be other things he was missing out on. In February of 2003, he quit his job as a video game designer in Brisbane, Australia and used the money he had saved to travel around the world until his money ran out.

A few months into his trip, a friend he met while traveling gave Matt the idea of dancing everywhere he went and recording it on his camera. This turned out to be a very good idea. Now Matt is famous as "That guy who dances on the internet�.

Some people have asked Matt �Who holds the camera for you?� Matt answered, If I�m traveling with someone, they hold it. When I�m on my own, I ask whoever is nearby. They just think I want a snapshot. By the time I start dancing, it's too late to back out. Generally, people just laugh and play along.
By the end of 2005, Matt traveled through 55 countries and had visited all of the continents. In that time, he danced a great deal.

I was an Economics major. Any corrections or advice is appreciated.

Woland · Joined: 10 May 2006 Location: Seoul

The text seems fine. (I'm assuming these are high beginner/low int readers.)

But in your subject line, it should be 'grammAr'. The way to remember it is that it is related to the word 'grammAtical'.

Yu_Bum_suk · Joined: 25 Dec 2004

poet13 · Posted: Thu Dec 07, 2006 11:19 pm Post subject:

"The text seems fine. (I'm assuming these are high beginner/low int readers.) "

Wow, if that came from any of my Korean students, I would probably try to adopt him. He would be off the chart where I teach.

Yu_Bum_suk · Joined: 25 Dec 2004

poet13 · Posted: Thu Dec 07, 2006 11:28 pm Post subject:

Ah, ok...I see that now... Embarassed

frankly speaking · Joined: 23 Oct 2005

A few months into his trip, a friend, he met while traveling, gave Matt the idea of dancing everywhere he went and recording it on his camera.

There should be a comma after friend and after traveling. The subject: friend gave Matt.

Corky · Joined: 06 Jan 2004

"was make and play video games."

I'm not sure, but shouldn't it be "to make" and "to play"?

Also, you forgot quotation marks on the second quotation in the second to last paragraph.

Kyrei · Joined: 22 Jan 2003

Novernae · Joined: 02 Mar 2005

passport220 · Joined: 14 Jun 2006 Location: Gyeongsangbuk-do province

Just to give a little credit where credit is due. Most of the writing came from the web site [url]wherethehellismat.com[/url] . Dave�s poster ddeubel told me about the site and gave me a great idea for a lesson.

If you have not seen his video you should take a look just for general interest. This man Matt has traveled all over the world (including Antarctica) and he does this goofy little happy dance wherever he goes and captures it on camera. I am using it as an introduction warm up to a lesson on travel (travel terms, check in to a hotel dialogue, etc.).

I wrote a small part of it and cut and pasted the rest from different places on the site. Since I pieced it together and it would seem Matt is an amateur writer I wanted to have it checked.

I can make the changes and present it with confidence to my students. Truly, thank you one and all VERY much.

Take care