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Helix
Joined: 05 Aug 2009 Posts: 6 Location: Bulgaria
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Posted: Sun Aug 09, 2009 11:49 pm Post subject: Please help me to make the best of this text |
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Hi dear Teachers! How are you today! Great to be in contact with you! Have a nice day!
Please help me to make the best of this text:
New Technology Center being built in place of Krek metallurgical plant
Within the period 5 to 10 years in place of Krek metallurgical plant will be built Technology Center, announced yesterday the ad interim Kavala Mayor Gerdo. He signed an agreement for the project preparation with Barni - Chairman of the Management Board of Technology Center in Burno, which is one of the top five centers in Europe. "It will enable the young and highly qualified specialists studying in Burno to find a place for their technical realization.''
''We will help with our technical expertise, although it will take a long time," said Bari, adding that the center in Burno provides 16 000 jobs.
"In the center, high-tech industries - IT technology, nanotechnology, photocell manufacturing will be developing,'' said before Laka the Kavala's Chief Architect Dichi. "It is possible to start it at the beginning of next year. It depends on the way the things are going with Krek. It is also very important whether and how the company itself will continue to exist," explained Dichi.
According to Gerdo the European Union will finance the project with � 90 m. _________________ Have a nice, sunny, lucky day! |
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redset
Joined: 18 Mar 2006 Posts: 582 Location: England
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Posted: Mon Aug 10, 2009 3:00 pm Post subject: Re: Please help me to make the best of this text |
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Helix wrote: |
New Technology Center being built in place of Krek metallurgical plant
Within a period of 5 to 10 years a technology center (if it's a name then use capitals: 'Technology Center') will be built in place of the Krek metallurgical plant, Kavala's interim mayor Gerdo announced yesterday. He signed an agreement for the project's preparation with Barni, Chairman of the Management Board of Technology Centers(plural right? It sounds strange in the singular) in Burno, which is one of the top five centers in Europe. "It will enable the young and highly qualified specialists studying in Burno to find a place for their technical realization (not strictly wrong, but I'd probably change 'realization' to something like 'abilities', or 'find a place to apply their technical skills').'' <- who said this? If it's Bari, the next sentence shouldn't be separated.
''We will help with our technical expertise, although it will take a long time," said Bari, adding that the center in Burno provides 16,000 jobs.
"In the center, high-tech industries - IT technology, nanotechnology, photocell manufacturing - will be developing,'' said Kavala's Chief Architect Dichi, before Laka (is Laka a place, or a time/event?). "It is possible to begin at the start of next year (what you had is fine, this feels a little better though). It depends on the way things go (changed from 'things are going' - I'm assuming it depends on how progress goes in the future, and not just how it's going right now) with Krek. It will also be very important whether and how the company itself continues to exist," explained Dichi.
According to Gerdo the European Union will finance ('help finance' if the EU isn't paying for all of it) the project with �90m . |
I tried not to change too much so it keeps the original feel and you can see what I've done. Some of the changes aren't that important, I just think they make it flow better, and I didn't understand a couple of things (like Laka) so I took a guess! |
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Helix
Joined: 05 Aug 2009 Posts: 6 Location: Bulgaria
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Posted: Mon Aug 10, 2009 11:05 pm Post subject: Hi dear Teachers! |
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Tnx very much for your help! You are so kind!
Now again I would like to ask you to correct some of my texts to sound in the best way. By the way Laka is a newspaper.
And here is the text:
Five personal tasks
Oro has set Anvi five personal objectives: to stop smuggling, to end abuses of excises, transparency in customs operations, interaction with non-governmental organizations and check of signals for offences, published in Media.
"As a former director of DCO I know smuggling channels and their participants on both sides," stated at his presentation Anvi. He refused to say what persons from the highest levels of power were holding umbrella over the informal economy, as he informed in his leaving of DCO in 2005, after having entered into conflict with the then Minister of Interior Enpe.
Customs officers with nicknames being cleared
The new Director of Customs has stated that he considers to clear the Agency from employees with nicknames � customs officers, about whom official signals were submitted that they have been serving definite interests. However, Anvi refused to comment whether he will change his Deputies and when. He left with Kova and the Chief of the NRA Mira for Vadi, where they will be inspecting the Tax Department and the local Customs Office in accordance with the Minister's schedule.
The new Director of the Agency said yet that he knew many experts from Genta - the private Brazilian company with which the ex-government had concluded contract for consultation, and would rely in his work on its assistance. On the question to the Minister of Finance if the contract with Genta would be terminated, Kova said: "Their activity is useful for us and their contract, which expires in 9 months, probably will be extended." _________________ Have a nice, sunny, lucky day! |
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