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[Bubu]

Hello asterix, bud, obelix and helen

I have not been around for quite a while, only because I got my questions anwered in [or at?]other sites. I thought I should say hallo to you all and ask this question too.

Here in this letter, A friend of mine has prepared a pragraph in which a nation-wide institute re-introduces itself. And I have rewrtten it mixing with it some made-up information, just to tell my friend the areas he should focus on. I would like you to check both. Plz help

Dear Sir,
It's out great pleasure to informyou that the institute of xxx, a widely known and reputed institute with state-of-the art technology, running successfully all over India in different centres. It's a proffessional, value based educational system on 'accounts', payroll, taxation, online finalisation etc. through computer. It's different in the way because of the innovative programmes latest versions in accounting and the academic excellence. Moreover it's commited to the man-making effort through institunal learning


Dear sir,
As you may have heard, the nation wide institute "THE INSTITUE OF COMPUTER ACCOUNTING" has a branch at Puri, it is out pleasure to inform you that we are successfully going to complete our first year in this town. The response to our newspaper ad. for the opening of our 25th batch[or group?] has convinced us that we have cartainly gained the confidence and appreciation of the locals here. We ascribe our sucess to our computerised education programme, the application of modern classroom equipment and, of course, the hard work of our competent faculty. We currently offer course namely "Accounts", "pay roll", and "online finalisation" and on increasing demand, we are thinking of adding new proffessional courses.

Thank you asterix, obelix, bud and helen

[bud]

Ok, Bubu, here it is. I hope it helps.

Dear Sir,
It's out great pleasure to inform you that the institute of xxx, a widely known and 1 reputable institute with state-of-the-art technology, 2 is running successfully 3 all over India. It's a professional, value-based educational system 4 about accounts, payroll, taxation, online finalisation, etc., 5 on computer. 6 It's different in the way because of the innovative programmes latest versions in accounting and the academic excellence. Moreover it's commited to the man-making effort through institunal learning

1. "Reputed" means claimed to be so, but there is doubt.

2. Missing verb. (Remove the clause starting "a widely known" and it is easier to see that the sentence is incorrect.)

3. "All over India" is enough to say that it is in many parts of India.

4. While "on" works here, I think "about" is clearer.

5. I can't decide which preposition is best here, but I think either "on" or by."

6. The last two sentences need some more work. I don't completely understand what the intended thoughts are.

On the postive side, the paragraph shows a lot of knowledge of English. There are some mistakes, sure, but most of it can be easily understood. The sentences are fairly complex, so the difficulty in getting them absolutely correct is high.

Dear sir,
As you may have heard, the nationwide institute, The Institute of Computer Accounting, has a branch at Puri. It is our pleasure to inform you that we are successfully going to complete our first year in this town. The response to our newspaper ad for the opening of our 25th 1 batch[or group?] has convinced us that we have certainly gained the confidence and appreciation of the 2 citizens here. We ascribe our success to our computerised education programme, the application of modern classroom equipment and, of course, the hard work of our competent faculty. We currently offer 3 courses named Accounts, Payroll, and Online Finalisation, and 4 due to increasing demand, we are thinking of adding new professional courses.

1. Neither works well here. Possibilities: training facility, education site, training site, education facility, location, office,..

2. "Locals" is grammatical, but it is often used as a derogatory term. "Citizens" is safer.

3. It might be more ususal to say "courses in accounts, ..." This way (actually naming the courses, with the corrections) works well enough, though.

4. "On" is correct, but unusual in this situation. "Due to" or "because of" is clearer.

This is very well written. It shows a lot of comfort with the phrasing that is natural to native speakers.

(Note that I've made some minor corrections without highlighting in both paragraphs. Look closely at the text.)

Good luck, Bubu. Please ask if anything is unclear.

[Bubu]

Here is a smilie

Here is a big THANK YOU

And here is a big kiss on your hand for the answer.


The 'batch' in the second version of the letter means "group of students".
It means the institute has has already taught 24 groups of students and is going to teach its 25th one. Could you suggest a better word?

Thanks

[bud]

Thank you, Bubu.

The most natural word would be class (or course if each group of students took more than one class).

[missdaredevil]

It's out great pleasure to inform you that the institute of xxx.
=It's out *of*?

Thanks for answering

[bud]

I don't understand your question... In this case, "of" appears to be part of the official name, based on the second letter. "Of" could be thought of as "concerning" or "dealing with."