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admiral

Joined: 17 Sep 2005 Posts: 546
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Posted: Fri Oct 21, 2005 5:04 am Post subject: This spring she told me, it didn't matter |
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When we met us the first time,
I saw the reason it�s still the same,
but I didn�t tell you this,
I didn�t want me to miss.
The things I see are still the same,
but I noticed it was still a dream.
More and more mails from you I got,
everything I knew were only a thought.
And as the time went along the line,
and each time I got your sign,
after the second of your faint,
all these feelings came up again.
Yes, angel,
I have to admit that I have had a crush on you,
since the time you said to me, it doesn�t matter.
Do you still know the words,
that we should still stay as friends?
I only say about me, cause,
I know, that I can�t force
I told you, because of him,
I didn�t care how it would seem,
wherever you go, whatever you do,
that I will always be there for you.
I really don�t hope anything behind,
I can only tell you what�s to my mind,
every time I blink at your face,
that I see the paradise in your eyes. |
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RedRose

Joined: 21 May 2004 Posts: 2735 Location: GuangZhou, China
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Posted: Fri Oct 21, 2005 5:14 am Post subject: |
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Admiral, your poem is far more gorgeous than mine.
Boy, can you teach me how to write porm well? with your teaching, I guess my poem-writing will be improved in the future.
Now I am conceiving a new poem  |
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stellara

Joined: 02 Apr 2005 Posts: 583 Location: germany
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Posted: Fri Oct 21, 2005 5:38 am Post subject: |
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such beautiful lines..
they are reality, not fiction, aren't they?! .. i'm impressed _________________ Don't cry because it's over - smile because it happened!
MOKEY ROCKS!!! |
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element105
Joined: 14 Jun 2004 Posts: 518 Location: Tsingtao,China
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Posted: Fri Oct 21, 2005 5:45 am Post subject: |
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WoW,powerful venus!!! |
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RedRose

Joined: 21 May 2004 Posts: 2735 Location: GuangZhou, China
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Posted: Fri Oct 21, 2005 5:54 am Post subject: |
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stellara wrote: |
such beautiful lines..
they are reality, not fiction, aren't they?! |
they are from reality!! abviously, the author is in love with some nice girl indeed.
Sorry, that's just my guess. if I am wrong, please correct me. |
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Timurko
Joined: 26 Sep 2005 Posts: 39
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Posted: Fri Oct 21, 2005 7:41 am Post subject: |
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Very nice poem. I think, that it is form reality too. |
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admiral

Joined: 17 Sep 2005 Posts: 546
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Posted: Fri Oct 21, 2005 10:03 am Post subject: |
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Yes, every word here is the truth. I'm sure that you can remember. |
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RedRose

Joined: 21 May 2004 Posts: 2735 Location: GuangZhou, China
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Posted: Sat Oct 22, 2005 3:05 am Post subject: |
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admiral wrote: |
Yes, every word here is the truth. I'm sure that you can remember. |
Good job! Admiral! Go ahead!
Why can you always come up with so decent poems? contrary to your poems, my poems are always second-classic.  |
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admiral

Joined: 17 Sep 2005 Posts: 546
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Posted: Sat Oct 22, 2005 9:39 am Post subject: |
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RedRose wrote: |
Why can you always come up with so decent poems? contrary to your poems, my poems are always second-classic. |
Actually, I`m bad in English, and I also wonder that this poem is from me.
So, I think that we only need to find the perfect girl for us to write satisfied poems. |
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RedRose

Joined: 21 May 2004 Posts: 2735 Location: GuangZhou, China
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Posted: Sun Oct 23, 2005 2:52 am Post subject: |
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admiral wrote: |
Actually, I`m bad in English, and I also wonder that this poem is from me.
So, I think that we only need to find the perfect girl for us to write satisfied poems. |
Ummmm...Now I am crazy about poem-writing, according to your viewpoints, that's because I found a lot of perfect guys? I don't think so
In your case, you are right, some perfect girl made your day and you felt happy to write perfect poems. but in my case, I just wanna become the most excellent poet!
Some people told me that my poems are not so decent, I know that. But I also know a famous proverb: Rome is not built in a day. I have to practice those scatological poems first |
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flower
Joined: 11 Nov 2004 Posts: 186
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Posted: Sun Nov 06, 2005 12:19 pm Post subject: beautiful |
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So beautiful poem |
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RedRose

Joined: 21 May 2004 Posts: 2735 Location: GuangZhou, China
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Posted: Sun Nov 06, 2005 3:36 pm Post subject: |
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yes. I think Admiral ought to take this one to our contest! |
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