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[Pollawut Ramluek]

In this time, alcohol isn't new or strange for many people. If you drunk, it's not amazing but you can't control yourself because alcohol will influence with Cerebrum Brain and Medula of Longata Brain. Besides, you will be ill if you drunk much alcohol because it's increased in your body more and more. In my opinion, drunk is noy bad if you not drunk before drive because it make many problem. First, it will make problem for you. For example you have an accident same many people in headline news, and you willgo to jail after you check by alcohol check machine with police. Second it make many problem to other people such as many people have dangerous because driver can't control himself. Last, it will make problem to social. For example, it make many accident and many died and broken, and your country will emitted money for defend sad story.
In conclusion, if you drunk, you should not drive. Take a bus or taxi for safety yourself. Do you agree with me?
By: Pollawut Ramluek MCE ID.48215436

[lotus]

Hi Pollawut,

If I may, I'd like to edit your essay for clarity.

These days, alcohol isn't new or strange to many people. If you get drunk, you shouldn't be surprised when you can't control yourself, because alcohol affects the cerebrum and medulla of your brain. And besides, alcohol can slowly accumulate in your body and damage your body over time. In my opinion, being drunk isn't really bad, as long as you don't drink and drive. Drinking and driving can cause a lot of problems. You may get into a accident and suddenly be on the 10'clock news, where everyone can watch the police give you a sobriety test and send you to jail. Also, if you drink and drive, you are endangering the lives of other people. That makes you a social hazard. In conclusion, you should not drink if you are going to drive. Be safe and take a bus or taxi. Do you agree with me?


--lotus