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koko~



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PostPosted: Wed Apr 19, 2006 12:16 pm    Post subject: need help.... Reply with quote

please everyone, please help me check the grammar and sentence structure....pleaese....

I totally agree Edmund Burke said �The use of force alone is but temporary. It may subdue for a moment, but it does not conquer.� When there is a conflict between people and people, the use of force is first idea come out in their mind. They don�t think about what result they will have. They don�t think about to use of force to solve the problem whether or not is permanent or temporary. At that moment, they just think about what they want. Because of this, the use of force alone can make the life casualties, and let the people get angrie



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PostPosted: Wed Apr 19, 2006 12:46 pm    Post subject: Re: need help.... Reply with quote

koko~ wrote:
please everyone, please help me check the grammar and sentence structure....pleaese....

I totally agree Edmund Burke said �The use of force alone is but temporary. It may subdue for a moment, but it does not conquer.� When there is a conflict between people and people, the use of force is first idea come out in their mind. They don�t think about what result they will have. They don�t think about to use of force to solve the problem whether or not is permanent or temporary. At that moment, they just think about what they want. Because of this, the use of force alone can make the life casualties, and let the people get angrie

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Here are my suggestions:

I totally agree with what Edmund Burke said, "The use of force alone is but temporary. It may subdue for a moment, but it does not conquer.� When there is a conflict between people, the use of force is the first idea to come out of their minds. They don't think about what results they will have. They don't think about whether using force to solve the problem is permanent or temporary. At that moment, they just think about what they want. Because of this, the use of force alone can casue casualties and make the people angry.

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koko~



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PostPosted: Wed Apr 19, 2006 1:02 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

thanks for help Surprised


i have one more question, does the meaning of this paragraph is clear?
and the thesis statement is ok?
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 19, 2006 1:41 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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First of all, the use of force alone will let a lot of people lost their life. For example, On October 16, 2002, President Bush Signed the United States Congress in the White House through to be authorized president to the Iraqi use of force resolution. The reason why he decided to use of force to attack Iraqi because he thought in the Iraqi hided a lot of dangerous nuclear weapon, then he had a excuse reason to attack Iraqi. Since the war began, there were thousand and thousand of people died such as American�s army, people in Iraqi, and Iraqi� army. Thus, the country lost their talents, and the family lost their dear member. This was very hurt. Nevertheless, president bush can not use of force for long-term because if he still attacked Iraqi, there will be more people died. Consequently, the use of force alone is temporary because it will cause more casualties.

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