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[welkins2139]

A lot of people have been evacuated because the storm was too strong.

The arrest lead to the new trace of the death of the leader after the police interrogated him.

Are these complex setence OK?

Thank You

[asterix]

A lot of people have been evacuated because the storm was too strong.

This is OK

The arrest lead to the new trace of the death of the leader after the police interrogated him.

It is not clear what you are trying to say here, so it is not OK.
Did the police kill the leader?
Did an arrest lead to new information regarding the leader's death; or what?

[welkins2139]

It is the arrest that lead to new information regarding the leader's death. How do I fix the sentence?
Thank you asterix

[CP]

"It is the arrest that lead to new information regarding the leader's death."

First, "lead" is present tense, "led" is past tense, hence:
"It is the arrest that led to new information regarding the leader's death."

Second, you could throw out "It is" and "that" to streamline the sentence and make it more direct:
"The arrest led to new information regarding the leader's death."

Third, "regarding" just slows down the sentence, so:
"The arrest led to new information about the leader's death."

Like that better?

Yours truly, CP

[asterix]

I like it better - thanks CP.