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[Rabino]

Hi. proffesors.-

In order to improve my english, I was writing some essays. I would like to get advice about them..I mean whether the pace is right or the words are used properly. I will appreciate your help. Of course, I will understand if rules do not allow my petition.
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Since a long time ago, people have had the opportunity to both to pay for things wanted or needed and to barter for them. In fact, many ancient cultures practiced bartering much before a kind of money was created. But currently, these two ways of trading are under discussion.The pros and cons are being dealt with by specialists. Personally, I believe that the creation of money has improved our lives.

Some people claim that many ancestral societies were ruled better using bartering to trade with others. Since, some had certain products that others had not, the use of this was essential. Also, according to specialists, in this way tribes could seal treaties of peace as, an example, tobacco played a vital role to native american tribes mainly in north america.

On the other hand, people like me, see bartering as an old-fashioned way of trade. Because, once the creation of coin and paper money, societies began having considerable benefits since its use has been widespread and popularized. Likewise, present-day countries based its economy on the quantity of saved money they have.

To sum up, This controversy about whether is better bartering or uses a coin-paper money, and its negatives and positives aspects, are under a strong discussion. Thus, many new ideas will turn up and doubts as well.
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Thanks in advance

My best regards.

[flying_pig319]

The pace and organization seem great to me. Here are my word corrections (the new words are UPPERCASE).

Since a long time ago (YOU COULD SAY, "FOR A LONG TIME") , people have had the opportunity to EITHER to pay for things wanted or needed OR to barter for them. In fact, many ancient cultures practiced bartering LONG before a kind of money was created. But currently, these two ways of trading are under discussion. The pros and cons are being dealt with by specialists. Personally, I believe that the creation of money has improved our lives.

Some people claim that many ancestral societies were ruled better using bartering to trade with others. Since, (NO COMMA) some had certain products that others DID NOT HAVE, the DOING this was essential. Also, according to specialists, in this way tribes could seal treaties of peace. As an example, tobacco played a vital role to native american tribes mainly in north america. <<I FIXED THESE LAST FEW SENTENCES

On the other hand, people like me, (NO COMMA) see bartering as an old-fashioned way of trade. Because, (NO COMMA) AFTER the creation of coin and paper money, societies began having considerable benefits since its use has been widespread and popularized. Likewise, present-day countries BASE THEIR economy on the quantity of saved money they have.

To sum up, this controversy about whether BARTERTING OR COIN-PAPER MONEY IS BETTER, and IT'S NEGATIVE and POSITIVE aspects, IS under a strong discussion. Thus, many new ideas will turn up and doubts as well.

GREAT JOB!!!