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[elysium]

Hi, everyone..I'd like to ask you what grammar faults in some sentences.

First, I would like to talk about some startling statistics. We took a survey of consumers on what they think of sweat and smell. 98% of the people admitted that they have experiences sweat at the armpits. Only 48% of the people said they have smelled foul odor at their armpits.

In above paragraph, isn't there any grammartical errors in this sentence, "98% of the people admitted that they have experiences sweat at the armpits."?

Please....help me....

[CP]

I would rewrite it as, "Ninety-eight percent of the respondents admitted that they had experienced sweaty armpits."

Usually, we don't begin a sentence with a numeral; anywhere else in the sentence, "98%" would be fine.

The respondents admitted it at the time they answered the survey, but the sweaty armpits happened at an earlier time, so you want to use the past perfect -- had experienced.

You didn't ask for this, but I would also rewrite the second sentence: "We took a consumer survey of opinions about perspiration and body odor." And I would rewrite the last sentence: "Only 48% of the respondents said that they had smelled foul odors from their own armpits."
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[Nef]

Isn't there any grammartical errors in this sentence?



Also, since you are writing about errorS (plural), it is better to say

Aren't there any grammatical errors in this sentence?

One error IS...

Two or more errors ARE...