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[phill458]

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[jinks]

I got as far as families (family's) and communities (community's) and gave up. Two more points though - the John Grisham novel shouldn't be in a footnote - if it is relevant, then include it in the main body of the text. Maybe you should say 'expectations' instead of 'prophecy', just a thought.

ETA: I like the title, though.

[phill458]

Thanks for the look, i did a [Mod Edit] job on the first write!!!

[recessiontime]

which law school is it you are applying to?

[phill458]

I've got a list starting with U of M, georgetown, northwestern, boston u, boston c, osu, george washington, george mason, notre dame, william ad mary, u.c. berkeley.
My problem is I graduated #1 at Michigan State University with a 3.9 gpa but i scored a 153 on the lsat. Therefore, i'm trying to take an extra extra careful look at crafting my essay before sending it to another professor and have it looked at.

[recessiontime]

Outside top 15 I wouldn't bother, especially in this economy. You need to raise your LSAT for that.

Have you heard of jdunderground.com

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[zappadelta]

William and Mary! My hometown! I also like the title. Good luck!

[Ruthdes]

I would make your sentences shorter. I once read that if you have to read a sentence twice for it to make sense, it's not a good sentence. Seemed like good advice to me, and I regularly tell this to my (adult) students. You could break many of them up into two parts.

University shouldn't have a capital letter.

I agree with putting the Grisham thing into the body.

Please run a spell check. "Priveldege" (privilege) for one, is spelled wrong. Even my browser picks this up.

I wouldn't use "To wrap this up", but that is my personal opinion, and maybe you're using it to represent your own style.

What is the usual length for a law school application essay? I feel like this is too short. Could you elaborate more on Korea? My first thought was that this finished really abruptly and left me wanting to know more about how Korea shaped you.

These are my first glance corrections. It still needs work, but the content seems good.

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[Kuros]

I would remove the part about what your stepfather did to you. It will likely only make the reader uncomfortable.

My vague sense of Georgetown law school is its one of those super-competitive schools where most people are unhappy.

http://www.nationaljurist.com/content/best-value-law-schools

[Globutron]

Sounds too informal, even for an informal essay. The structure of the sentences just sounds like gossip written on paper to me.

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